There were countless ways that Goren reduced her to a trembling puddle of goo…
The smile that was hers alone. The way his eyes followed. The way he called her Jamison, until they were in the bedroom, then it was always Blake. The unselfconscious beauty of him in nothing but a towel. How sweet and vulnerable he looked as he slept.
The most overwhelming was five simple words. Not “I love you,” Not “Will you marry me?” Five words that were the sexiest thing he could ever say, “Is this okay with you?” - the keys to unlocking her heart.
Full Version: Flash Fic - 5 Simple Words ---- (Actually it's 100) ;)
::THUD::
Oh wow. Great job.
Hi Bubba here, wow that was pretty good Kat. 
Wonderful as usual. I loved the last line... 
QUOTE (ciaddict @ Jun 24 2008, 06:15 PM) 
::THUD::
I wrote a THUD story - woohoo!!!
Writing a story that makes someone go ::THUD:: is a lot better than writing one that makes someone go ::HUH??::
QUOTE (cifan70 @ Jun 24 2008, 06:34 PM)
Oh wow. Great job.
QUOTE (Bubba_Bridges @ Jun 24 2008, 07:04 PM)
Hi Bubba here, wow that was pretty good Kat.
QUOTE (AmandaB @ Jun 24 2008, 07:46 PM)
Wonderful as usual. I loved the last line...
Thanks for the R & R - I appreciate you taking the time to read.
Well, crap the bed, I think I need an inhaler!!!
QUOTE (cluck73 @ Jun 25 2008, 07:09 PM)
Well, crap the bed, I think I need an inhaler!!!
LMHO, cluck!
Peyton, it IS wonderful writing something that makes a reader go thud, isn't it? I should know, my Chapter 1 made several, and my beta girls have been thudding over the rest I've gotten done so far, too.
This is so hard to do, and yet you wrote one that is truly a WOW!!! Congratulations!
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