This fanfic isn't going to be "just another DetectiveMcPDQ, unfinished fanfic". Indeed, this fanfic is going to take time. But I'm putting all possible effort into this fanfic. Hopefully, everyone who reads this will learn a lesson and will enjoy this fanfic.

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that's a little wierd. ^<3

it's really good so far... keep going

Thanks for all the comments, they mean the world to me.
"Olivia, you and Elliot go talk to the McHensons.They might know alot more information than what we think," Captain said. So, by the looks of it the man with the buzzed haircut was Elliot and obviously the lady's name was Olivia. My guess was they were partners. Olivia nodded "nice meeting you,guess I'll see you later" she said as she smiled at me. "I believe so," I managed to say. She walked into the squadroom and Elliot and her both headed out the door a few seconds later. Just as the elevator door closed I heard Elliot ask her who I was. "Follow me to my office," Captain said, I did as my Captain ordered.
As I walked through the squadroom it seemed like the entire squadroom went silent. It was like my first day of highschool all over. A few detectives started whispering one of them who looked a bit older than I who was typing busily at his computer looked up at me in what I decided was confusion. They must've all been wondering who I was. Had no one been informed I was coming besides the Captain? Finally, the entire slow-motion walk through the squadroom was over and I entered the Captain's
office.

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Pretty good. I'd like to see more.

Wow! that is really good!! it was so neat how your words actually helped me feel exactly how you were feeling!
good job! Pls keep writing!!!!!
K.C.

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K.C.

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I really like it Please continue

"Hi," he said as he held out a hand, I shook it. "Hi," I repeated. "Well, I let you two get aqquainted," Captain said and with that he was gone and back in his office. "So, my name is Chester Lake. Tell me a bit about yourself," he said as he rolled out a chair from under a desk and near me. I sat down and so did he,"well" I started.. I got a bit dizzy but shook it off. "My name is Victoria Sloan, I'm originally from .. not here," I laughed a little as did he.. we seemed to be bonding a little. I went on to tell him a few basics.. my age, favorite color, favorite movie, why I'd chosen to be a detective and a few others. By the end of our conversation I felt even more comfortable in the squadroom. Just like Olivia he told me that he once was a rookie and there was no need to be nervous.

To be continued..

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Good job! I really like it. The story is really interessting :-)

There comes a time where people are bound to break. For me that time has come and gone and not once have I broke. In fact, on one particular night I remember I went out on a date with this boy I was totally head of heels for. So, we were at a resturaunt.. not the type I was used to but it was the idea that counted... but we were there and suddenly Dillian walked in. Who's Dillian? Well, glad you asked.. Dillan was a boy my mother was trying to set me up with. His parents were rich and were best friends with my parents. I hated the guy, he knew my parents were fond of him so if ever he got a chance to remind me he would. I remember that night like it were yesterday.. he'd just finished walking in and saw me "Hey there Vick," he said as he sat down on the booth I was in. I moved over as far as I could almost into the wall,"Hello Dillan," I managed to say. "Lovely evening, and a lovely girl.. geesh bud you sure are lucky," Jake the guy I was on the date with stared. "Yes. I am lucky.," he smiled. I looked at him and smiled. "Yes, well.. you know Victoria.. my mother is having another party of hers tomorrow evening.. and I already know you're attending because your mother told my mother you were. So, I'll see you there?," he asked as he looked into my eyes. "My mother said I was going?," I asked. I wasn't shocked, my mother always got me stuck in situations where I'd "run into" Dillian. "Yes, my dear she did. Well, look I'm here with a few of my buds.. you know, I have to keep the normies in line as well.," he smiled. Then, this is where he pretty much ruined my night.. he leaned in and whispered into my ear, a whisper that was loud enough to hear across the table "but when your done with this sucker you know you're more than welcome to join us," he smiled and kissed me on the cheek. I stared at him as he got up "bye bye," he said as he walked away. Jake looked at the floor " you know what, this isn't going to work. We're from two seperate worlds. You're all caviar and wine. I'm pizza and bear. He's better for you, do yourself a favor.," and with that he just walked away. "But Jake.. " he was already gone when I finished the rest.. "I love you." Since then, I must admit I'd given up on love and on emotions. I thought crying was overrated.. in movies someone always comes to your rescue and stops the tears and pain. For me someone comes and makes me cry more. I was making sure that past and present didn't collide. Too bad I didn't see what was coming..

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A week later I was getting used to being part of the squad. All cases had been pretty minor so far and I was enjoying hanging out with everyone. It was a Thursday evening and most of the squad members had left. Chester, Olivia, Munch and I were the only ones left finishing some paper work. When.. it happened. It pains me to even recall what happened. We were all sitting there talking about heading to the bar after work and I heard Captain call my name from his office. I turned to see him and there standing was .. well.. "Hey Vick" he said. Dillon! "Victoria, Dillon and I were just talking about you. Seems your friend here is a detective as well.," Craigen smiled. "Yeah.." I whispered. I who was still sitting in my chair just stared at Dillon who had a huge smirk on his face. Fantastic I thought, this was my mother's work. Why is it I can't just try to live without her messing stuff up? Everyone in the squad just stared as Dillon walked over to me, I stood and he grabbed onto me. "Haven't seen you in forever Vick. We've got alotta catchin up to do." Great! I thought sarcastically.

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So, I completely understand how some people would think I'm a paranoid person. I haven't had any commited relationships for the past eight years, I have no friends, and I'm scared that almost everyone is out to get me. Yeah, in your eyes you're probably thinking I'm a freak who needs to get over her rich self. If you only knew my mother the way I do.. you'd completely understand. She twists everything in my mind until I can't even think for myself. She manipulates me into doing anything she wants. Everything, except for going out with Dylan which kills her. Dylan isn't a bad person.. he's just.. Dylan.
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"Victoria, go on I'll finish up the work.," Olivia said. I looked at her "thanks .. you sure?" "Of course there's not that much left anyway, go have fun.," she smiled. I nodded, grabbed my coat, and Dylan and I walked out the door. On our wait for the elevator Dylan put his arm around my waist. "Whoah there pal.." I removed his arm "not so soon." He looked with a look of curiosity, "what?," he asked. "You're a detective?," I asked a smirk across my face. "I'll have you know I am. And I'm looking for a squad."
"Really, and you haven't told me this.. why?," the elevator door opened and......