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Thanks. :-) I'm always open to advice and/or critiques. I know my format is a bit off, but I'm working on it. I'm still new to the whole TV writing thing, though I've worked on a few movie screenplays.

It's okay.

But when I try to imagine watching an episode, I can't really imagine the second post happening, however the first one is a bit more believeable.

It's pretty good, though.

I didnt get a chance to read all of it (I'll try later when I have more time) but I will say I like the Yahoo thing. That's something I can see Shawn saying.

I think you need to work on the Monk part a little. Monk seems.... well, he doesnt talk that much, mumbling or otherwise. He seems just a little bit too animated, if you get what I'm saying.

I'll try and read the rest later, but I've gotta go! Good job otherwise though.

Hey, thanks for the tip. Yeah, actually of all the characters, I am finding Monk the most difficult to write. I'm going to have to go back and edit for sure. He has a very distinct voice, and it's hard to nail. That's the fun, the challenge of it. It's difficult to get the subtle, flat lines without erring either too dull or too animated. I am tending to err on the animated side ATM, but rewriting always helps that. This is really rough stuff right now.

I liked it... but since I am such a hugh sucker for Google... i must say the part where you say he perfers Yahoo is just a little BLAH! GOO GOO GOOGLE! Yahoo seems to be calling me a fowl name. But keep it up and one day we might see something on TV writen by YOU! like ummm CSI: ZING

lol! CSI: Zing. I like it.

Writing for TV would be awesome, though I don't know how realistic it is. We'll see what happens.

Lol, I actually really enjoyed reading what you have here. It's funny. I agree that Monk was a tad bit out of character but he IS really hard to write.

I'm wondernig what Juliet is planning on doing.
Ya know what? You should post this over at psychfic.com there are already a few crossover fics over there and yours would be a nice addition to the site.
Plus you'll get a bit more feedback.

But keep it up. It was funny, especially when Lassiter tried to get back at Shawn for taking his power bar.

I think it's quite funny. Monk does seem like a hard character to write but you're doing a really good job.

the funny thing is, I can see this playing in my head as I read... if I keep on... I might forget it was NOT part of the show

I think it is quite good and can actually see the characters saying this as I read along and you are doing a good job with Monk, I don't have any issues with what you have written. So far I am intrigued enough to keep reading and see how the story ends...not so sure about Gus breaking down in tears however...

That really had me hooked. I couldn't stop reading it.
It was an awesome ending. It was really funny too. Great job!